Build a New Computer

Feb 6, 2016 16:44
A few days ago, computers of my colleagues came to act up.

Since the cause seemed to be the motherboard, it was difficult to repair it.

So today, I purchased some computer components, and built new ones for them.

I challenged to use the Mini-ITX standard for the first time, but I had trouble wiring the cords because of the smallness.

Finally, somehow I could complete them, and they worked.

I'm tired, but it was fun.
新しいPCの組み立て

数日前、同僚たちのPCの調子が悪くなり始めました。

マザーボードの調子が悪いようで、修理することは困難でした。

そのため今日、私はパソコンの部品を購入し、彼らのために新しくPCを組み立てました。

今回初めてMini-ITXの規格に挑戦しましたが、小さくて配線するのに苦労しました。

しかしなんとか完成し、無事動かすことができました。

疲れましたが、楽しかったです。


No. 1 Seralt's correction
  • Build a New Computer
  • Building a New Computer
  • A few days ago, computers of my colleagues came to act up.
  • A few days ago, my colleagues' computers started acting up.
  • Since the cause seemed to be the motherboard, it was difficult to repair it.
  • Since the cause seemed to be the motherboard, it was difficult to repair it.
     "it is hard to read" とかの文章は "tough construction" と呼ばれています。重要なのは、論理的な目的語は主語に成っていますので、繰り返せないこと。
  • So today, I purchased some computer components, and built new ones for them.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • I challenged to use the Mini-ITX standard for the first time, but I had trouble wiring the cords because of the smallness.
  • I tried to use the Mini-ITX standard for the first time, but I had trouble wiring the cords because of the size.
     or, "...because of how small it was."
  • Finally, somehow I could complete them, and they worked.
  • In the end, I somehow managed to complete them, and they worked.
  • I'm tired, but it was fun.
  • I'm tired, but I had fun.
     Stylistically, it's nicer to have the same subject in both clauses. :)
Nice! I'm glad you were able to help out your colleagues.
Toru
Thank you very much for correcting my post!
I learned something new :D
> I'm glad you were able to help out your colleagues.
Thank you for the comment. I'm glad too :)
No. 2 Kireas's correction
  • A few days ago, computers of my colleagues came to act up.
  • A few days ago, the computers of my colleagues started to act up.
  • Since the cause seemed to be the motherboard, it was difficult to repair it.
  • It was difficult to repair since the cause seemed to be the motherboard.
  • So today, I purchased some computer components, and built new ones for them.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • I challenged to use the Mini-ITX standard for the first time, but I had trouble wiring the cords because of the smallness.
  • It was my first time using the Mini-ITX standard so I had trouble wiring the cords because of their small size.
  • Finally, somehow I could complete them, and they worked.
  • I managed to somehow complete the wiring, and they worked.
  • I'm tired, but it was fun.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
Toru
Thank you so much for correcting my post! :)
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